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#8Sunday--The Fall Line

4/10/2015

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I've been getting back into my women's fiction work in progress this week. The Fall Line is a story set in ski country, with some cross-over characters from Dancing in the White Room. It's been giving me fits and starts, but I hope to get it moving forward again as I'm getting close to putting 'the end' on it and finishing the draft. 


In this scene, the main character, Mia, has broken it off once and for all with her boyfriend, Connor.


"Answer me this, Mia --did you ever love me?"

 "Of course I did." All the good times we'd had together raced through my brain—Connor holding my hand as we watched fireworks, Connor sitting behind me on a toboggan, his arms around my waist as we careened down the hill behind the Inn,  Connor undressing me for the first time, his eyes heavy with want. I had loved him, hadn't I?

            "I don't believe you ever did." He stood up and walked out the door without looking back.

            No, I wanted to shout, I did love you. It's just that I loved skiing more.



My other ski-themed story, Dancing in the White Room can be found HERE 



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9 Comments
Millie Burns link
4/12/2015 03:07:06 am

Bummer, she doesn't have room for more than skiing in her life... BTW, your link back to wewriwa doesn't work. Could you please fix that?

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Ute Carbone
4/12/2015 08:23:49 am

Yeah, she's learning it's not the only thing, but it's taking her awhile. I fixed the link (I hope) thanks for letting me know.

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Christina Ochs link
4/12/2015 03:54:17 am

Aw, poor guy! Sounds like you're setting up an interesting journey for Mia.

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Ute Carbone
4/12/2015 08:24:53 am

Well, he's already left her once. So he may not be the right guy for her, but it's still hard for her to let go.

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Naomi Shaw
4/12/2015 04:32:55 am

Emotional snippet. Filled with fire and passion. Love it

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Ute Carbone
4/12/2015 08:25:22 am

Thanks Naomi. :)

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Sara Barnard link
4/12/2015 05:07:55 am

I loved this eight and the end sentence was awesome!! I loved the insight into her state of mind and her wondering herself if she loved him. Drew me right in!

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Ute Carbone
4/12/2015 08:27:04 am

I'm so glad you liked it--this story has been giving me fits and starts, so I'm really grateful for the encouragement. Thanks Sara!

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Veronica Scott link
4/12/2015 02:55:13 pm

Interesting snippet, I can see so many possibilities for story telling here. Can't wait to see what happens next!

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